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The warrior’s art
Playing the part of a guard
Grasp hardness of steel.
Running towards death
Happily plunging to Hell
My enemies swarm.
I absorb the sword
A morbid mind of torture
The war vulture flies.
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The warrior’s art
Playing the part of a guard
Grasp hardness of steel.
Running towards death
Happily plunging to Hell
My enemies swarm.
I absorb the sword
A morbid mind of torture
The war vulture flies.
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well.. look.. way too short for my liking, dude.. sorry.. from what I was reading.. it was good.. alot of shit could've been put into this to make it real dope.. don't think i'm trying to be a prick or anything.. nine small lines just isn't enough to interest me.. know what I mean?.. anyhow.. see you around, dude.. keep writing.. -un0..
Do you know what a Haiku is? If you don't like haikus coming in, then why feed the piece? This was pretty cool, it really did have a war-fever feeling to it. Thanks for feeding my piece with ledgenZ man.
pZ
I thought it was decent. It really didn't have that climax that I look forward to in haiku but you portrayed your ideas well. The topic is pretty straight forward unless you're really being metaphoric and it's not about a samurai who is wiling to die. The imagery could be a lot better, you have to be very selective with choosing the words for a haiku. You have a very small space to make a large impact. Keep at it though, you could have a talent in the field.
Ummm...Not a fan of haiku's but this was okish. Kinda bland and not much for the mind ya know...
this piece was a good haiku.......the beggining middle and end went together very well...at first he's grabbing his weapon....then he's fighting///and at the end I envision that the vultures are eating his remains....For a short piece this had great imagery.
For some reason it seems like the shorter pieces in this section have the best Imagery.
and by the way its dope to see someone dropping haiku's in this forum
great job....and I'd like to see some more haiku's
this maight inspire me to write a Few myself
pz and stay up Ninjah Red.
coo haiku, haven't seen one of these in awhile, imo i'm not a fan of these, but u did nicely place every element u needed into such a short piece, and props for that, imagery woulda been a plus, but not a must... emotion was straight awell, imo as a whole this was a pretty solid lil drop right here, stay up