Re: It's going down tonight
Re: It's going down tonight
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Originally Posted by
Little Rage
it was a choppa style
excuse me, can you elaborate plz....
Re: It's going down tonight
Very nice mna, had very nice rhymes, some of them were a bit basic but the peice didnt suffer from it cause you had a nice flow going. Chorus maybe coulda used some work but overall very nice peice man. Keep it up.
Re: It's going down tonight
I'm sorry, but the first two bars was wack...
"First off guys, I take it your all fuckend gay
Yes, homo, oh no, tape my guts away and I say
You aint makin any play, I say I protect my case
From all you fuckend gay homo trying to rape my ass away"
Almost made me stop reading but I decided to give you the benefit of the doubt. The rest of it was much better, but you could still use elevation... I noticed that you had a rhyme scheme, which was good, but in many cases it was oversimplified, like rhyming "mind" with "blind". Bigger rhymes will come more naturally with practice though, so that aint too much of an issue... topically, this was alright... O/A, this was about a 6.5/10. Stay up
return the feed on my piece "Killin It"
Re: It's going down tonight
Re: It's going down tonight
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Originally Posted by
kilaplaya
First off guys, I take it your all fuckend gay
Yes, homo, oh no, tape my guts away and I say
You aint makin any play, I say I protect my case
From all you fuckend gay homo trying to rape my ass away
just wanted to use this opener to express my anger of what peoples get in the states for weed usage and selling.... they are treated like dogs........... and weed should be legalized
Re: It's going down tonight
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Dead.... upping.... feed would be welcome so i can do a crazy piece next time, come on
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Why isn't this piece audio? This is not text material.
t’s going down motherfucker, invade the embassy
Leave elephant stranded, rambling around enemies
Alien alike, and I strike, you dike, I Merck you alive
After you die, I strive for power twice, with the almighty might
You know how hot that would sound audio? with the right rhyme scheme.
Good work Kid.
Re: It's going down tonight
upping... feed both pieces plz