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  1. March 15th, 2004, 09:42 AM #1
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    On The Edge

    Tears fall
    No reasons for why
    Screams cry
    No reasons for why
    The pain is real
    I'm to numb to feel
    I close my eyes and drift to sleep
    My mind turns sour
    My heart beats it's last
    You can't wake me, I've set myself free
    If you want to cry
    Don't do it for me
    Move on in life
    For i've finally moved on in mine...


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  2. March 15th, 2004, 11:06 AM #2
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    Interesting. A very direct approach to ure topic. Nice emotion into it, and the structure was pretty good. Try and up ure vocab next time

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