alliteration (justification)

[Shi]

Pathetic puppies perched, posing as proper patriots
Civilized soldiers shot, swearing they’re saving shit
Challenging countless countries, counting clips
Belittling battered boys into oil’s bitch
Licking legislative leprosy off of legal lips
“Hippies” hiked up, hiding their heated hips
Too thugged out to try to topple terrorists
"Nah b, I just shouldn't be here for this."
You're more comfortable caught where killing is cancerous?
"I'm better off on the block..."backhanding a bitch?
Pass me your profile that portrays you as a pimp
Little lieutenant looked likely with a limp
"I gotta eat and get bread even if she gotta break beds"
Get fed? Face force, get forced to face feds
Decide and dictate the difference between decent directions
riddled rhythm rife with ruptured reflections...

-shi-

((its been a few since i dropped...the blue type is a nigga who spoke up that he was better off where he was, on his corner of the block, rather than goin to war...before anyone decides to note...his words dont go with the alliteration (or mock thereof) that the title gives off...but thats cus he was supposed to represent sumthin different from my own thoughts...::cough cough:: even though he is a generation of my thoughts...lol))

[Shi]

uppin for replies...

[Civilized Rebel]

I don't get it. Er, well I think I get it. The blue text boy seems to be apathetic and doesn't want to fight any war. And you seem against that. But from the start of the peice it seems like you're anti-war too, yes?

Well, it might just be me since I'm up so fucking late though. So I might have trouble comprehending it. Either way, especially with the alliterationality, much respect and big ups.

~Shalom~

[Bloom.Quist]

Confused on what u were trying to accomplish with this piece. I mean good use of alliterations, but rhyming everysingle word is kinda wakked. Just my opinion. Andyway good use of illiterations.

...Moogle BITCH