intermentals vs Fire aka Nikkelz

[intermentals]

10 lines
Due within the hour
No feedin (dont pick up on nethin in the others verse)
Check in then spit

[intermentals]

Look I eat herbs u dont want it wit me I seen ur played name
An u told me u was a newbie wen I hit u up on aim
U still wont ‘show spine’ wen ur head gets ~snapped backward~
Ur verses r like Eminem's...how u get ~'clapped' that quick~
Ur best effort won’t get u nowhere like workin in prison
Wouldn't be a 'cut above the rest’…wit a messy circumcision
My punches 'galvanise' you into action…but you still won't 'shine'
Shit World War 1 was fought on less ‘front lines’
U aint vain Il give u that u dont care bout lookin cool
Cos one of the interests in ur profile is goin to school

[Fire aka Nikkelz]

Its crazy how u day-dreaming, thinkin that ur rhymes have effect
U just an undercover newbie clamin that u a vet
U need to stick to pen and paper cause ur text scripture is bullshit
U like undeveloped film..u not getting the picture kid
Stand straight, be a man about the whole situation
Before you get your head busted off and i aint talkin masturbation
Its ashame how u think that u better than me
Your rhymes is like butterknives and I bringing the guilotine
And u need to change ur whole flow cause we dont feel u when u talk
Its funny how this female turned a vet into an outline of chalk

[$pitacular]

WOW..... both of you need help. #1, Inter you ain't a vet, nor even good.... and #2 both of you were freestyling.... seek the extreme elevation forum, it will help you both. Punches baby, punches... that's what you want....

[Fire aka Nikkelz]

^ He posted in the forum that he was a vet or some shit, I was bored and thought that i would give it a shot...thanks $pit!..lol

[Q.S]

intermentals

1st off Eminems verses get clapped at not clapped.....
.....add more multis 2 ur verses, ur punches are decent!

My punches 'galvanise' you into action…but you still won't 'shine'
Shit World War 1 was fought on less ‘front lines’
^ BEST LINE MAN!


good job over all




Fire aka Nikkelz


ur battles keep gettin betta.....
nice 2 c u spittin harder!
LMAO @ da chalk outline thing!
U like undeveloped film..u not getting the picture kid
^ nice


good verses both of yall

vote= Nikklez!

keep spittin!

[Criminal Minded]

Instermental- flow: ok, Structure ok, enhoyed: 5/10 overall: 4/10
Nikkels: Flow: ok, structure ok, enjoyed: 5/10 overall though 5/10
vote Nikkels
hit me up in my battle http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....php?p=1460712

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Ambiguous

[$pitacular]

Nikkels.... Dimez is also an excellent source of help if you want to learn.... she can murder in text.

[intermentals]

lmao...ok...Im battlin a female newbie wit a verse that took 5 mins...bcuz fire wanted to leave soon...check the times...after I set this up we talked on aim for like 5 mins an she told me she had to leave...so I keyed the verse in the remaining 5...an fuk that obvious d/r vote from dimez

[$pitacular]

^yo dude don't talk shit about Dimez, or I'll get TR in here LOL

I don't care if you dropped that in 30 seconds, it was garbage.

[Fire aka Nikkelz]

^^ Dont talk about Dimez...and face the fact that u lost to a female, and i think that the battle was garbage from both of us bc I knoe i could have done better.

[PurFormIt]

Yup, def 2 freestyles. Flow n structure weren't that good for either of you but both ahd good lines. Intermentals you had some nice lines but ou also had some bad ones. The front lines one, the Em one....both weak....shoulda had a better opener.....closer was OK. Other than that the verse was good. Fire aka Nikkelz...You had some nice lines also, and a couple bad ones. I wasn't feelin the pen n paper line that much and there was a couple filler lines. Your structure was off. Your flow seemed really bad at first but it's straight after reading it a couple times. Other than that you had a nice verse. Overall I have to give this to Fire cause her good lines were better and her bad lines weren't as bad. Both verses were nice considering the writing time. But next time don't give room for excuse.

[nOkShUs NóTz]

Intermentals

Look I eat herbs u dont want it wit me I seen ur played name
An u told me u was a newbie wen I hit u up on aim
3/10

U still wont ‘show spine’ wen ur head gets ~snapped backward~
Ur verses r like Eminem's...how u get ~'clapped' that quick~
3/10

Ur best effort won’t get u nowhere like workin in prison
Wouldn't be a 'cut above the rest’…wit a messy circumcision
5/10

My punches 'galvanise' you into action…but you still won't 'shine'
Shit World War 1 was fought on less ‘front lines’
7/10

U aint vain Il give u that u dont care bout lookin cool
Cos one of the interests in ur profile is goin to school
6/10
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Fire aka Nikkelz

Its crazy how u day-dreaming, thinkin that ur rhymes have effect
U just an undercover newbie clamin that u a vet
7/10

U need to stick to pen and paper cause ur text scripture is bullshit
U like undeveloped film..u not getting the picture kid
8/10 ah haa

Stand straight, be a man about the whole situation
Before you get your head busted off and i aint talkin masturbation
7/10

Its ashame how u think that u better than me
Your rhymes is like butterknives and I bringing the guillotine
6/10

And u need to change ur whole flow cause we dont feel u when u talk
Its funny how this female turned a vet into an outline of chalk
7/10
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This battle was decent.. not really the most amazing but decent. Inter had some hella weak shit, no hate though.. knowin both verses were just a quick key. Fire had some nice shit for a quick key so that’s props..

Vote – Fire

Can yall hit that link up in my signature and poll an honest vote? Most appreciated.. LATE..

[Exculptifactoriusness]

yeah this was obvious...

Intermentals thought he could come here from anopther place and getting 5 wins to battle in elite was going to be easy. Wrong.

You came wack man. Dont use ~ in your verses, even to indicate wordplay. they shouldnt vote if they dont get it. But the punches were blah and the only personal about aim was bad so.. Flow was off and the strcuture was ok though. Work on it.

Fire came good. She didnt have anything grea but she really didnt newed to come hard to win this. You had some ok punches with decent personals. your elevateing and getting better. i like to see that.Flow was good and ther structrue was good. Good verse altogether

V/Fire

[Criminal Minded]

It was an ok battle but not the best i seen

Instremental: his structure was betta dan fire aka nikkels, your flow was ok, personals alil i sw, ya pucnhes were ok too, I enjoyed it but not as much as nikkels, in overall you stat is a 5/10 cuz it was a lil weak

Nikkels: your structure was ok sum lines were stretchhed but ya flow was stilll good, punches were also good and I saw alil personals, Multies N/a , I think you should work on text, I enjoyed it more than intrementals thats y it made it ez to pick who one your overall stats was 7/10

Vote: Nikkels