Taste

[Mesmerize]

This was suppose to be a collab but no one ever finished so I figured Id drop it anyway...


Taste


Succulent drops of your evening dew fall upon my famished lips
Untying knots of an addiction, to fulfill lust’s depiction of your savored tongue
Flavors so young, sprung through me like an enchanted palace, a painted sunset
I could taste the gleaming ocean under the moon realizing life hasn’t begun yet
But your sweet breath crept on to me like the wind carrying the breeze
Falling to my knees as our lips meet, tastes of dreams percolate my retreat
Leaving an aftertaste of your soul I could see and feel as mouths traced
Placed in a haven of ambrosia making me immortal, death erased
Enlightened upon ones power of a soul’s divine kiss
Making me a goddess of your kingdom of eternal bliss…

[Mesmerize]

yeh i know the structures fucked up...didnt really care about structure this time, lol

[Laureate]

A nice poem with many allusions....gives the reader a
deeper meaning

I felt the poem started off kind of sexual, and the
progressed into the love of a person. Vocab was good
as were the internals that you placed in there. This
would be a good verse on the 5 senses Keep at it
Mes

-Lyr

[Mesmerize]

Thanks Lyric...this was supposed to be a collab on the senses but I dont think anyone ever finished, lol

[Thrust]

you got real into that piece i see there
really got deep into your meanings
the relation was descripted tremendously
really grabbed my attention with your creativeness
you also had a good use of words
along with a good flow throughout

very nice piece mez...i need to start checking your pieces more often

stay up

[ILLusions]

"Untying knots of an addiction, to fulfill lust’s depiction of your savored tongue"

^^^^
That is why you will always be a legend to me....good work Mes. I actually missed reading your pieces. This was def nice...i know you said something about the structure but overall, I felt this one. I just wished this was a little longer. Good shit, as always, hit me up later if you want to collab....once again, good drop!