dj... vs Tim [Topical]

[Tragedian.]

Fuck lazy bitches vote..and leave links!

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Last upp hoes.

[The Boss]

I will come back and vote on yall when i can k i just started and if you have any advice fo rme check out my battle with ghostly and let me know ite thanks

[The Boss]

I will come back and vote on yall when i can k i just started and if you have any advice fo rme check out my battle with ghostly and let me know ite thanks and ill hit your battle up latterdjdtydtjdy

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[Jon]

^ lol

Tim- You had a decent verse, didn't over do anything, had nice little phrases, well thought out lines.. You came pretty well as usual. Uh, I would have liked to see a more poetic side of it though.


Dj- What can I say, you tried, it was almost all there and all, but you messed up. Towards the end, you started sounding less and less experianced. Everything got repeditive, but I did like how you added the pictures.

v/Tim. Better overall verse in my opinion..

when you get the chance, can you check my battle vs Blind Sences or w/e

its topical

[Kit Cloudkicker]

dj...- Your topical drop was good...The vocab was alright and imagery was on point..the flow to me was a little off, it seemed like you had some lines that were forced and didnt go to well. Some lines imo also seemed to just come out of nowhere too, i would have liked to see a little bit more of a smoother flow

Tim- I liked your drop as well. I would have liked it more if you would have rhymed every line like dj... did, but i got your concept and it still made it nice. Your vocab was good, structure was nice and easy to read (Dj's was to), nothing seemed forced and it all seemed to flow together...your imagery was also good and you set a good picture in the readers mind about your whole drop...

Both of you did good
But i have to give it to Tim...No hate to either one of you

[P. Mortuus]

This was an aight battle.
DJ it was good to see that your trying to face better opposition and all and i reckon experience of battling against good heads is what let you down here. Your verse was aight, but it seemed rushed at the end or maybe you just didn't or couldn't add that x factor in your verse na mean. Your verse was charismatic or awe inspiring..nonetheless a good verse. Tim your verse was good to. The best thing about your verses are the fluid transitions and flows from one line to the other which makes it enjoyable for the reader to read. Furthermore, your wording and rhyming was good to.

\/ Tim, for having an overall better verse that was more fluid and entertaining.

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