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    The Unheard Views Vol. 1-3

    The Unheard Views Trilogy. Vol. 1-3
    By Luke B-Quist

    Volume 1


    Unseen pupils blink, throughout this blank atmosphere
    Voicing opinions of old times to take you back a year
    Dropping tears of knowledge that ears cannot bear to hear
    While onlookers dream of America without a fear...

    Verbal discussions prove worthless..
    And political figures curse this...
    To whom can take and revert bliss?...
    And rise to it the public surface?...

    Speed quickens as heartbeats stop, forget, and lose a beat
    Can you control a persons mind or will you soon retreat?
    Take what they teach you in life, and dispose your grief
    Form own opinions and views so life will not repeat

    Open new paths to bound, so time wont get rewound
    Put one foot in front of the other, careful, dont make a sound
    Unheard views collide and slam with one another around
    As kids get ingored and youth knowledge seems to change profound

    Volume 2

    Teens grow with a forced image of blind, blank ignorance
    But adults choose to refuse truth, and pretend they can't picture this
    Minds spread with denial that youth can't comprehend life
    Where in reality beings craniums just cant comprehend strife
    My views go ignored and travel in minds and throughout
    As I create opinions, feed myself knowledge and spit it back out

    I try to relate experiences so I am prooved as one of a kind
    Spitting my poetic anthologies as my mind and tounge unwind
    Life...a locked up book waiting for you to unpick the cages
    You need to fill in details, plots, stories, and continue pages
    Why can't beings comprehend the complexity of my train of thought?
    Are human senses too bland to admit something they have been taught?
    I dont know an answer but I strive on for one to appear
    Reader please continue with me, as I enscribe this unknown fear...


    Volume 3

    My poet's pen has almost dried, im running out of ink
    I must consume as much views as my mind can handle to think
    Flow is now out of the question, I need straight facts and truth
    For ignorance among your peers is common from the youth

    Verbal woes are not the lessons I chose, so why are they here?
    Whom can I trust with poetry? For unheard views is not a fear
    Tears bleed a river from pupils dispersing inner thoughts
    While kids take underground essence, grip tightly and drop

    Poetry, its the essence of life in a rythmatic art form
    I forlorn you inconsieveable beings with your reward
    These thoughts will go unheard, for minds cannot read under...
    the obvious translation that these lyrics uncover.
    Po'Ethics - Est. 2004




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    Excuse me if the catagories of volumes interrupts the piece. But I originally wrote the first verse, then decided to continue on with it I guess. Feedback would be much appriciated. Thank you.
    Po'Ethics - Est. 2004




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    bleh
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    I think its great! I makes it sorta seem like your writing for someone, like different letters, or journal entries. Its really good. A bit more vocab and images, might spice it up a bit though. But over all, nice job.

    Peace OUUUUTTT!
    haha.

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    bump
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    Bloom you did a very nice job with this piece I love the flow in this it was just so well written you really did a good job.

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    weak...but thanks
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    you tard. i wrote for nothing...

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