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Thread: Dear Katrina,

  1. September 7th, 2005, 04:17 AM #1
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    Dear Katrina,

    When she left-me, it upset-me. & I was torn-to-bits...
    ...never imagined for a second that it would come-to-this.
    She stormed outta-the-door, as I tried to shout-her-before...
    ...she caused anymore mayhem, but i was blocked out-or-ignored.
    She opened her mouth-to-retort, I expected a long-winded-reply...
    ...but all I got was an icy silence, a strong-cringe-n-a-sigh.
    There was no stringent-goodbye, just the SLAM of our front-foor...
    ...as I prepared myself to deal with the reprocussions once-more.
    See, the hot air gets to her. & we dont scream or shout-kid...
    ...but when me n my baby row, the whole WORLD knows about-it!

    I love you Katrina.


    - God.
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    Its the place to be. Come down and you'll see. - Phillip Round


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  2. September 7th, 2005, 04:18 AM #2
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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=229939
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=229931
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  3. September 7th, 2005, 04:43 AM #3
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    well this is an interesting piece, and uh... i dont kno if ya really talkin about a chick, or u referring to tha hurricane...coz u seem to make it sound like both and thats an effective technique, i think u have to make this piece longer as theres a min. limit aint there? was a good piece, and dont put this " - - - - " shit to connect your words, we can see that they're mulits, but nice drop...
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  4. September 7th, 2005, 05:24 AM #4
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    Haha, I was speaking on the girl AND the hurricane. Im glad it sounded like both, cos that’s the effect I was going for!!! Ive only just learnt what multis are, that’s why I didn’t the ---- crap, but if u think I shud drop that then I will. Thanks for the feedback.
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  5. September 7th, 2005, 05:31 AM #5
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    stop using the - - -

    not bad, but toooo short.

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  6. September 7th, 2005, 06:16 AM #6
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    When she left me, it upset me. & I was torn to bits...
    ...never imagined for a second that it would come to this.
    She stormed outta the door, as I tried to shout her before...
    ...she caused anymore mayhem, but i was blocked out or ignored.
    She opened her mouth to retort, I expected a long-winded reply...
    ...but all I got was an icy silence, a strong cringe n a sigh.
    There was no stringent goodbye, just the SLAM of our front door...
    ...as I prepared myself to deal with the reprocussions once more.
    See, the hot air gets to her. & we dont scream or shout kid...
    ...but when me n my baby row, the whole WORLD knows about it!

    I love you Katrina.


    - God.


    Is that better?
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  7. September 7th, 2005, 07:21 AM #7
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    ...

    this was ayt wasn't really feeling some parts got confused a lil bit.

    The structure is what you need to work on,you got ok vocab and the rhymes were pretty good, keep it up.
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  8. September 7th, 2005, 07:54 AM #8
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    Confuzing.....didnt understand who or what da fuck u wuz talkin bout and structure 2 this type of shit lookz like a poem.....Poetic Scriptures homie
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  9. September 7th, 2005, 08:35 AM #9
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    Its not that hard to figure out. Open your mind a little.
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  10. September 27th, 2005, 10:28 AM #10
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    i thought it was pretty tight u def mixed it between a girl and the hurricane i like u style mahn keep that shit up homie
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  11. September 27th, 2005, 10:54 AM #11
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    ^^^^^^^No he didnt, man


    You did so many errors in this is unimaginable, i feel like you could have talked about how she was similar to the hurricane

    You needed to give imagery in a piece like this, this shit wasnt near that...VERY SIMPLE, this was a great topic idea...but you messed it up!
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  12. September 27th, 2005, 05:36 PM #12
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    the structure was a bit weak but the flow and the rhymes were good
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