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MaRVJay
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I Deploy Words, To Annoy Herbs Like Winding Up Dope Plants And Destroy Birds..
Fucin Up Ya Project Like Nino Brown Coz Ya Shit Needs Work Like Unemployed Turds!!!
^Birds = Girls
Nino Brown was famous for turnin the projects into ghettos by makin crackhouses etc
Luck Just Smashed!! I Put Ma Dic Into Garbage The Way I Just Fucced This Trash!!
Its Like 2nd Rate Dealers The Way I Asked For The Strongest Herb And Got This Hash!! (omg)
^ Iasked for the best textcee (herb) and got this second rate dude...its like what hash is to skunk..
also hash means to fuc up!!!
You Got Ta Dream!! Hit Me With Phenom (venom)...Na Bruv Ya Aint Got The Sting!! (ouch)
Stop This Thing When I Pull Arms So Quick Ya Eyes Roll In Ya Head Like Slot Machines!!! (should i stop???)
^if ya dnt get that dnt vote!!!
Toy Glocks!! ..The Only Bars You Been Behind The Ones In Ya Spit While Ya Boys Locked!!
Id Cut Ya Voicebox Out And Make Ya Eat Ya Words But You Too Busy With Boys Cocks!!!
^if ya dnt get that dnt vote!!!
Finisher:
Feeling Gats??? Like Dodgy Banana Smashing This ***** Is An A-peel (appeal) into Whack (wack)
Gangsta??? Na Bruv!! Not When Busting Cold Belts Is The Only Way You Chill With Straps!!! (Murdered)
Fuck You
y am i battlin u im tired of scrubs,he's puss dont think dis guy is a thug.
dos aint raps u post u couldn't lay down bar's on da side of ya tub.
he must dont mind a bed and iv...but why he,think its smart to try me.
fuck hittin ya legs dogg ima aim at ya face and give ya I 3.
i pack all da lead so i'll put caps on his head like dis fucker's a jew.
ima call u a CRiP now cuzz u only spit somthin hott one in da BLUE.
i told I3 to pick up a mic stop textin jus 2 see how he really flow.
its worse than his text,so only victory he gon see is a b.i.g video.
how u suppose 2 be tuff son when i done seen lil kids smack you?
but keep thinkin u curtis ima put 50 on ya back like his tattoo
good verse..
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Fuck You
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I Deploy Words, To Annoy Herbs Like Winding Up Dope Plants And Destroy Birds..
Fucin Up Ya Project Like Nino Brown Coz Ya Shit Needs Work Like Unemployed Turds!!!
meh
Luck Just Smashed!! I Put Ma Dic Into Garbage The Way I Just Fucced This Trash!!
Its Like 2nd Rate Dealers The Way I Asked For The Strongest Herb And Got This Hash!! (omg)
nah, fucc explainin dude, use actual witt
You Got Ta Dream!! Hit Me With Phenom (venom)...Na Bruv Ya Aint Got The Sting!! (ouch)
Stop This Thing When I Pull Arms So Quick Ya Eyes Roll In Ya Head Like Slot Machines!!! (should i stop???)
threats is ok, but dont push without dirt too
Toy Glocks!! ..The Only Bars You Been Behind The Ones In Ya Spit While Ya Boys Locked!!
Id Cut Ya Voicebox Out And Make Ya Eat Ya Words But You Too Busy With Boys Cocks!!!
mehh
Feeling Gats??? Like Dodgy Banana Smashing This ***** Is An A-peel (appeal) into Whack (wack)
Gangsta??? Na Bruv!! Not When Busting Cold Belts Is The Only Way You Chill With Straps!!! (Murdered)
mehhh,
flow was stretched and the punches werent too hard either... use a more insult aproach rather than threats<<< altho some can be nice with a clever conception. the multis were good. but the long lines messed the structure. decent
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y am i battlin u im tired of scrubs,he's puss dont think dis guy is a thug.
dos aint raps u post u couldn't lay down bar's on da side of ya tub.
mehh
he must dont mind a bed and iv...but why he,think its smart to try me.
fuck hittin ya legs dogg ima aim at ya face and give ya I 3.
lmao... nice
i pack all da lead so i'll put caps on his head like dis fucker's a jew.
ima call u a CRiP now cuzz u only spit somthin hott one in da BLUE.
ok diss, i hope you not disrepectin.
i told I3 to pick up a mic stop textin jus 2 see how he really flow.
its worse than his text,so only victory he gon see is a b.i.g video.
lol.. meh punch
how u suppose 2 be tuff son when i done seen lil kids smack you?
but keep thinkin u curtis ima put 50 on ya back like his tattoo
nah
iight flow, needing multis, but your stucture was alot better, and your punches were good, some were bland and in need of some direct and insulting material, but overal you had this
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yo dis is gettin crazeee.........
lol at this guy.
I3-Uhhh, yea I do not know what site you come from or where you get your concepts. But this right here is terrible, cuz ya shit needs work like unemployed turds? Chief chief, its not a possible thing therefore its shit. The second thing is the explanation thing. Listen the people that should be understanding it will, and at the same time it takes emphasis off your punch and makes you look less confident that someone will not understand an already forced punch. Work on that ish.
Marv-Either you got your account jacked or you are not doing it like you used to. I think i recall a time when you wrote a bit differant, may be wrong. I mean you really didnt have to much that impressed me. It just seems like you knew you would win or knew he would drop kinda shitty. I guess text is loosing its appeal.
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Nah son...
-13-...you had a stragen structure here, you should probably stick to the normal, and not do this new jack city stuff you got goin on here. Your punches were meh, more stretched than anything...you could do with some re-wording and stop trying to be fresh, stick to what you know, if you get what I'm trying to say.
MaRVJay...1. RV sucks, and 2. your verse was meh as well, nothing too wonderful about it...your punches that were there hit, but if -13-'s bars weren't so stretched you'd of probably lost. But as it is, you could do to make your punches stronger, and less net thug talk. Read LLL.
v/ MaRVJay for a better punches.
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