Razorblade Romance

[Philly®]

Today may well be
the worst day of my eternity
yet openly waiting for
a resignation that's certainly
so hopefully
i can escape this diminished fate
from the ones who begin to hate
for words is not words
until the best man discriminates
with balls of anger
i'm ready to take shot's but yet
a quick move from right to left..
will get me nothing but net
my world crashes down
like the earth's had it's last breath
I WRITE..
Now imagine
paper dowsed in red wine
entwined with ink, it's harmless
like a drink with fowl stink
of a carcass
sometimes a reject, declined
my flesh is my love
but this tool is my concubine
NOW LISTEN..
as i'm called a dip shit
for letting MY OWN
fucking blood trickle down
my split wrists
LOOK QUICK..
.....drip.... drip....
my fluids patters n splashes
on paper and my keyboard
DEATH?
the real question is how soon
as this fiends blood streams
as i stream music from i-tunes
SILENCE..
fading to black
of course now it won't be long
as i drift i hear the last words
of that jay-z song...
"they neva really miss you till you dead or you gone" -jay-z


links
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...65&postcount=6
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...74&postcount=8

[Cody Nash]

wow, this was really fucking good. It gave sort of a real "gangster" type feel to suicide. probably the most original suicide "wrist slitting" joint that I've ever read the entire time I've been on here... obviously this was inspired by that jay-z line, and it definitely went well. there also seems to be a message in there that maybe he wasn't having a problem with people not wanting or caring that he was around, so he followed the words of the song that they won't miss you until you're gone. real simple, but really dope piece. I also liked the parts where you said things like NOW LISTEN, or SILENCE! because as I was reading I sort of did what you said to do... weird how when I read this I was listening to a Jay-Z song haha, it wasn't that one but yeah lol. (Lost Ones)... anyways, keep the shit up man, and hell... I liked this one so much I think I'm gonna go ahead and nom the bitch. great read bro... been a minute since I've seen anything of yours and you by no means have rust on ya. stay up...


- Nash



P.S. I might pm you somtime next week when I make a drop... I've been working on it for quite some time and I'd appreciate a read from ya. think you might like it.




by the way bro, so this don't get closed they require links in PS now.

[Philly®]

links edited in =]

[D. Josey]

Way to steal a title nigga.

[Philly®]

it was from IE, lol

[Märtyr]

I liked the flow of this piece, I usually don't comment on the flow of a poem, but it can't be ignored. really enjoyable piece. I like the feel, it fit well with the jay-z quote at the end. Cool

[Pacino]

Other then the fact a fucking period or camma would've been dope every now and then. I liked this.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...nd-359737.html
Hit that dude...


The wordplay was hella good for a Audio head . It wasn't elementary and actually helped the flow a lot. The flow was really nice and carried nicely off the tongue as a reader. I felt you had a nice rhymescheme. Wasn't too obvious, yet wasn't too complex either. Just right. The imagery was actually beautiful. And I liked the emotion quite a bit too. Keep writing Phillop.

[Philly®]

appreciate the feed..... fractured i'll leave feed on your piece soons i'm done with WOP voting

[Cody Nash]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...my-359831.html
here's that link I wanted you to hit bro.

[Spekz.]

Philly - i liked the swag you gave to a topic many have scrippled upon...it took a dark concept and made it almost amusing/humorous but more on a serious note..which seems to contradict itself but thats what i got...like i wanted to kinda chuckle at some lines..but then its like well that actually is pretty serious.....i kinda get this feel, like you may of been talking of your suicide but it also seems like you were speeking for the music industry and how its kinda killing itself with the itunes etc...either way its was a nice spit of "you" on a used concept..but you pulled it off well..

HIT UP THE NEW PIECE...

thanks

[Addict]

Wow man...Just wow. That shit was beautiful man. I really liked it. The flow was great and i like how it told the story. At first i was kinda like "Razorblade romance???? Wtf...Stupid emo bastards..." But then as i read this i started thinking "This is to beautiful...I take back the bastard part " lol. But it was still a nice piece man. Really good.


Edit: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...html?p=6199335 Hit me up man. Thanks thanks