Machine Gun Funk freestlye

[verde622]

Ayyo, kid what your angle?
Throwing yourself in to these situations, real danger
You must not know I'm known tote bangers
Yoke up my enemies and strangle total strangers
Hang em by they throat, air passage gets mangled
Add tension to rope and watch em dangle
I got problems with my anger, as if you couldn't tell
Bricks wrapped tight, so the dogs shouldn't smell
Or else I'm popping fido, and his owner too
Y'all niggaz fucked, like what a boner do
No homo on the flow, so don't get it twisted
Big booty bitches and some weed is on my wishlist
Other than that, just good Karma
Cause I got demons in present, fuck the past, its all drama
So with my sins, if I should go tomorrow, shit
I'll be reincarnated as a hollow tip
Fuck that, picture me as a bullet
ripping threw my old friends whenever niggaz pull it
Actually, its not as far fetched as I once thought
Because just like in real life, you only get one shot

[Sting3r]

get 2 feed back links

[Isaiah Thomas]

well I'm sure you'll get links soon so I'll feed this

I liked it, it had flow, gangsta-esque lyrics were cool
for some reason this verse reminded me of The Bay Area Bully "Ya Boy"
stay up fam and go get some links to keep your thread alive! haha
Peace.

[Esc0BosS]

nasty raw shit here...

Ayyo, kid what your angle?
Throwing yourself in to these situations, real danger
You must not know I'm known tote bangers
Yoke up my enemies and strangle total strangers
Hang em by they throat, air passage gets mangled
Add tension to rope and watch em dangle
I got problems with my anger, as if you couldn't tell
Bricks wrapped tight, so the dogs shouldn't smell

just some gully shit, make me wanna hurt a nigga lol

dope flow, multiz on point, lacking in any content but fuck it, i fuck with it, stay up #1

[verde622]

Examples of my feedback

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....html?t=379575

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....html?t=372359

[country]

actually i didnt like it.....


ur flow was aight, ur ryhmin was nicee


but i dont see any real shit with ur content


shouldnt rap bout drugs if u aint delt em

shouldnt rap bout guns if u aint shot em


have u delt n popped?

[Young Twotone]

meh it was ok, not somethin youd hear me walkin around like damn he snapped,
some of the shit you said was decent, others were a little eh, but keep it up, hopefully we see you spittin hotter next time.

[verde622]

word, word. I appreciate the feedback. respect.

[Crookshank]

lol you aint gotta say examples of my feedback if you dont want.... this wasnt bad at all kid... on some street level shit, but that aint bad at all, its just a different style. work on your flow/structure a little bit, and combine your rhyming skills with some internal rhymes and some metaphors or similes, wordplay can never hurt. I think if you stayed on that street shit n got better with your flow n wordplay you'd be set man. stay up

[Lurid]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...to-388584.html

please give me feed on this ^^^^^


anyways....
i was surprised by this piece. the flow was actually pretty good. the rhyme was basic but there was some good word play. it didnt hold too much emotion tho and there wasnt any vocab. the layout wasnt all that great either and for a OM i thought it was pretty short. however i see potential in you if you learn a little more structure and emotion in your pieces and you drift away from all the gangster lines...

[Crookshank]

lol by the way I'd appreciate some feed on any one of my drops if you can, dont matter which.

[verde622]

word. I've listening to a lot of Biggy after seeing Notorious and I just started flowing.