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    Graveyard

    As black imbued black, so was rendered the pitch of darkness
    That befogged this godforsaken yard of graves -
    And too the dank, ‘til now forgotten chapel that
    Did little to grace these forlorn grounds.

    Yet here stood I, seemingly first to tread this weed-ridden soil
    Since times of yore when life had erstwhile blessed this land.
    But for being lost in solitude - as does a country wanderer -
    Would I not have happened across this morbid landscape.

    And though detail rendered barely visible to my naked eye –
    For desperately had the moon tried to break through this jet fog –
    A sense of something suffused the place.
    Was it those tormented spirits desperate for absolution,
    Or perhaps the gargoyles teasing me on whether
    they be of stone or living flesh?


    As I approached, those tarnished pipes came into view.
    Standing erect with gothic pride, they bore down on me with patronising air -
    Exaggerated by the disjointed sneering of minor chords,
    As if to state that insignificant I had henceforth no grant of solace.

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    Re: Graveyard

    ill... put the picture and the ambiance right in my head... favorite line was the 'sneering of minor chords'

    i don't dip my fingers into the wider spheres of poetry too often, so i apologize for not feeling comfortable giving any criticisms... might not be able to help you improve, but i can just tell you this piece of work was appreciated

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