This was over all good had a nice flow great vocab and it was very good at describing what you wanted to get across to the reader.....

scribbled observations,
statements that a therapist might scrawl
to his patient, roaring laughter as he stares at a white wall -
grave digger, day-tripper, just preparing for nightfall
find me in the sauna, marijuana, mirrors & ice balls.
wrong place, wrong time, life's barely a nice walk
airport attendant on the mic when a terrorists' flight's called..
growing colder, as vanity and arrogance spikes tall
no telling when the blizzard in america might thaw,
cause even most our citizens aint playin the right cards -
actin like some bitches who be chasin their mikes hard.
paraffin lights bombs, brain fluidz level the pyramids
unearthing the masses through psychedelic experiences;
i've seen humor in death - so i won't settle for serious,
this manufactured reality looks much better delirious.
Pretty good..... this was kinda looked like you were taking a shot out to everyone who says this is what you should believe in... which is cool and you made it original but very wide observation.

I'd like to do more but I have house work to do so sorry about the short feed...

please rtf
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This was pretty dope.... nice way to open it.... especially the night fall line that was pretty dope.... good part of it good rhyme scheme and it stayed consistent.