~~DaTe~~

[sILLable]

another-date, probably gonna be another-rape,for brothers-sake you oughtta find another-mate//

he witnesses bleeding-and-bruising, which inturn is leading-to-using, and maybe abusing, his girl in tha future//

shitll definitley mute-ya, wishin for no more disputes-huh, put down tha gat dont shoot-mah//

convinced her not to blast, it was tha last thing i could ask, before i could even dash, she mashed, blew a slug in his mug all i heard was tha blood splash//

tha crash-as his body collapses, nauseous gases eventualy ashes, like when u get tha last-hit and it always cashes//

thirty minutes later tha pigs arrived, tha coroners behind, everybody askin who didnt survive, at right around five//

they found his corpse, on tha porch wit my sister scorched, see she been torchin meth right after it happens, she so messed up she beside tha body laughin//

tha truth is he was evil and deserved for her too clap-him, once she tried to slap-him, he got violent so i attacked-him//

police reports get lost in red-tape, tha shit i fed him he got fed-straight, fuck all tha legal shit he shouldve loved but instead-hate, thats why he a dead-date..

[MoparMaddness]

Nice piece. I can tell that it came from the heart. These things happen in real life and its sad to see it happen to good people. Keep writing, I find your writings worth the read and will continue to post to them.

MM

[HazY.B]

thirty minutes later tha pigs arrived, tha coroners behind, everybody askin who didnt survive, at right around five//
^
that had such a sad vibe to it...like im scared to go out now thinkin im either get raped or what not

your structure is something that sticks with you i can see
the single bar double line theory is one you like

the theme was great kind asad tho
but nonetheless good peice

[sILLable]

i appreciate tha replies yea this shits real life shhit now what im sayin, still upiin.~1~

[Twiztid_chick69]

I liked this piece. It just draws you into and I like the way you structure your pieces. I like that, its kool. Nice drop, and sad. its also sad how that shit happens in real life. I like reading your stuff so keep posting beau

peAce

[sILLable]

real thanks for tha replies baby girl, ill up this one more time.~1~