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    The Cannabis Call

    You've gotta have quick feet...
    For a slick retreat from police tryna steal weed...
    ...you've been to seek down the street
    If the sticky sweet reek it's secreting leaks
    Breaching the weave of pockets keeping it sheathed
    So it's released on the breeze like seeds on the heath
    A beacon teachin' thieving PCs of ya Green...
    The treat about to meet ya lips with a spliffs heat
    That then leaves as a mist screen to keep it discreet...
    ...a secret concealed underneath the sheets.
    But I mean... what society teaches is so obsolete!
    The police visit schools with speeches for teens...
    Tryna reach us before all the so-called fiends...
    Greet the 'fresh meat' stepping out on concrete
    in-between the stream of learning we're preached.
    Breeching a persons dream, sieging their 'Keep'...
    their dream to succeed with the theme of belief
    still unique, naïve, nothing yet been achieved
    You've conceived the first step to finding your niche
    But the timing competes in the mind of the weak
    with the crimes in reach of each in the fleet
    the curious streak that eats at the previous speed...
    Of stampede by ya steed, if ya choose the leaf...
    And leave the geeks to improve technique
    til you can roll a foot long spliff in your sleep...
    which is good cos...
    the more you persist the more you'll drift, doze and eat
    til your ideals are stripped and re-clothed in deceit!




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    Re: The Cannabis Call

    Don't know.. I suck at giving detailed feedback. But it was cool. Seemed like you just wanted to write a rhyme. If so, not bad either way.

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    Re: The Cannabis Call

    yea just had an hour spare, so keyd it up
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    Re: The Cannabis Call

    This was pretty dope. The flow is the spotlight of this piece. The internal rhyming gave the piece a breath longer than expected from its brevity. I think I'm safe in assuming most of us enjoy the sticky icky and the direction you took was cool, brought back memories of D.A.R.E lmao. My only real critique is that niche is pronounced like "itch" and not "peach". All together this was a cool drop, a bit understated, but then it was a keystyle. Keep em coming.

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    Re: The Cannabis Call

    Quote Originally Posted by HighEngineChief View Post
    . My only real critique is that niche is pronounced like "itch" and not "peach". .
    not in England its not lol... and I mean after all... its our language, so the way you pronounce it is the wrong way, not mine
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    Re: The Cannabis Call

    Lol touche.

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