Flower Pedals{Ayahuasca}

[Fatrick Swayze]

Convoluted veins tripping on the vines
Bullets dripping marking the ground
Concentrated hues spill out of the walls
Pouring colors mixed with concrete pieces
Ceiling fans reaching from heaven to hell
Winds of tide, seas rough from the currents
Shifting floor boards spewing rhetoric of falling
Black holes for windows, night consumes the sun
The moon dissolves against the glare of the stars.
With a Hendrix eye, ozzy vibes and a morrisson soul.
The rhythm melts with the brass
A schism that everlasting, binged in the prisms purity
Deluded deity praising myself to survive
Faithfully unspoken

Sweat dripping tunnel vision tunneling catacombs
Engulfing walls along with the screws paint and all
Bed springs afloat a sea of confusion
On the look out for white whales
Spearing armories hoping for shores
Psyched seagulls sing between the ceiling fans
Deep waters dried from the bed sheets
The longest midnight breaks for the sun
Deserts of pillows swallow my parched eyelids

Journey through a third eye's perspective
To get a second opinion
On one life.

[143]

You went deep in the abstract well with this. The highlights that fall from this in the beginning had me leaning towards a different topic but when I got to the second part, it became clear and clever. The discriptiveness in the first part really pull these emotions and expectations out to see where you are going into a big ball then you throw it at the topic hitting the mark. I like the juxtaposition that plays out in the first part. Never thought a piece about cumming could sound cool as fuck...or I might be wrong. Overall this is dope to me as a lover of abstractness. Nice....

[Emily]

Cor blimey. That's a bit full on isn't it? Every sentence is a maze of description attached to more, imagery,
The visions were strong. Full on. Re; what 143 said, his theory fit beautifully.
The emotional aspect that you draw out of your readers, fatt, still amazes me. The elegance about your poetry is spot on.
Abstract, it sped past me. Or did I speed read it? Regardless a strong core/pulse was evident.
And the wording I can't go into right now, because it is so jam packed with imagery, descriptive wording.
This was fun to read. It was very full on. Too full on to break down right now.
Just wanna say, fatt, you still rock mate.
you got it.