10 lines
Due 12 days
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@miracle
@mal diction
10 lines
Due 12 days
Regular rules
@miracle
@mal diction
yo...
aka Sorrow: the Broken Wing
I spit on fake MC’s; ahem! And put an end to them; Amen!
When Miracle steps on the scale it dont read numbers, it simply says: AGAIN!
Alas!..you’re doomed.. Putting you in a cocoon’s my task
Sentiments of the first bar, i’ll be dropping you like science... aftermath
I’m winning by a large margin..o’ the fat jokes, you would forget you MC’ed
Seeing you in every part of this battle, and that’s speaking more than figuratively
The imagery is seen, i hope by now we get the picture
In the bible: discipline feeds and from the looks miracle ain't missing dinner
Plotting the main course. Forget your ghostwriter.
In ten lines, i brought the flame to Mir like most lighters
aka Sorrow: the Broken Wing
It’s easy for me to rap n come up with lines. A couple insults I’ll hurl
Every time I drop a couple, it makes me wanna punch u n your girl
Fuck everything this queers keying, it’s wack n we’re all agreeing
Whenever we read malcontent, that’s exactly how we feel about what we’re seeing
All work n no play… that’s the shit that got ya wife straying away
No worries tho we always keep it briefcase you show up early from work that day
You’re a sad/hopeless faggot. Killing ya self would be a good start
Nevermind mentioning ur insecurity mal, ….your probably a rent a cop
Ya girl claims to be a loner… but still let’s me beat it till it’s mushy
Idk if she’s a recluse <— but splitting that in 2 words is how I’d describe her pussy
Last edited by miracle; May 31st, 2024 at 05:44 PM
Mal had a decent verse tbf I liked the seeing you in every part of the battle line. Aftermath has potential but just didn’t hit as hard as it could have and the closer wasn’t bar. You’ve come on massively since week one it’s nice to see. Miracle I think had a couple of bars that were a bit easy like mal content I’ve seen that a few times this season and the drop a couple kind of had potential but didn’t. I think your closet was dope though even if it did give me some minging imagery
V/mir
Mal diction:
I spit on fake MC’s; ahem! And put an end to them; Amen!
When Miracle steps on the scale it dont read numbers, it simply says: AGAIN!
Playful opener. I’ll be honest though I only like this one for the flow and humor. However it’s a bit cliche but I’ll give it to you at least you built it up and packaged it nicely.
Alas!..you’re doomed.. Putting you in a cocoon’s my task
Sentiments of the first bar, i’ll be dropping you like science... aftermath
I think it’s a decent rhyme scheme actually. First and last word in the first line rhymes, then the two middle words doomed cocooned
Forgive me as I’m trying to break it down and sometimes I get carried away. But it seems in this bar you built some pretty interesting imagery, was it that you are saying in this battle you will out rap (wrap) him out the cocoon? Sentiments to the first line you drop science after math. So I’m guessing the drop is for cocoon suggesting you will drop and out wrap the lil �� and force a transformation from him in the aftermaths as well as since you dropped a math line prior.. I feel like I reached with this one so because of that ima say I feel like this line was too loose not very concise. Didn’t wow me or fill in the gaps for me. I’ll give it a 5.3/10
I’m winning by a large margin..o’ the fat jokes, you would forget you MC’ed
Seeing you in every part of this battle, and that’s speaking more than figuratively
Ok here is a bit of a swing ok ok now we heating up…
Some fat wordplay here “by a large margin” “fat jokes” “mc’ed”
“Seeing you in every part” “figuratively “- so pretty straightforward the punch seeing you in every part of the battle was another fat joke and doubled the sting with the word figure. Maybe mc also was pun to mean mass x light. If so then I can see a slight layer in weight and seeing him in every part of the battle.
The imagery is seen, i hope by now we get the picture
In the bible: discipline feeds and from the looks miracle ain't missing dinner
Really good rhyme scheme on this one for sure
Plotting the main course. Forget your ghostwriter.
In ten lines, i brought the flame to Mir like most lighters
Ngl I don’t like the wording and it took me like 4 reads to grasp a concept from this but now that I have I can say it’s pretty good..
Plotting the main course is setting it up for food needing to be cooked. Then finishes with brought the flame to mir like most lighters..- if the line was actually bringing a lighter flame to the mirror ida been like ehhhh’ but I finally caught the “to” so it’s really read in ten lines I brought the flame, 2 mirror like most lighters. Two mirrors can actually be a lighter in sunlight I just wish it was contructed a bit better.
Miracle:
It’s easy for me to rap n come up with lines. A couple insults I’ll hurl
Every time I drop a couple, it makes me wanna punch u n your girl
Ok straight to the point and I get it dope line , couple is a play of relationship couples so you literally through a couple, couple insults
Fuck everything this queers keying, it’s wack n we’re all agreeing
Whenever we read malcontent, that’s exactly how we feel about what we’re seeing
Niceeee don’t know if intentionally done however this queers keying and this squares keying are homophones now I think I’m reaching to say this is a homo homo phone phone lol queer being a word used to describe someone’s sexual preferences that align with same sex or homosexuality then phones are squared and used to type messages or make calls and that can be “keying” so literally it’s a homophone however it’s used to describe sexual preference and cell devices lol that’s rich! And obviously the malcontent wordplay is superb.
All work n no play… that’s the shit that got ya wife straying away
No worries tho we always keep it briefcase you show up early from work that day
Nice word play here pretty obvious the punch line here but def hit
You’re a sad/hopeless faggot. Killing ya self would be a good start
Nevermind mentioning ur insecurity mal, ….your probably a rent a cop
Nice wordplay here too yeah definitely a decent line. In security insecurity
Ya girl claims to be a loner… but still let’s me beat it till it’s mushy
Idk if she’s a recluse <— but splitting that in 2 words is how I’d describe her pussy
lol �� bit a stretch no pun intended
Ok both battlers came with heat. I personally feel the verse that was more to the point with some heavy hitters is miracle. However I did enjoy and appreciate the intricate wordplay on both ends. As well mal you kept a solid theme all the way through it’s just a few lines I had to read a few times to grasp.
V/mir
FAQ - pronounced fack…
Eye or E.Y.E - divination (seek knowledge using computers)
Reddit- A web “sight” with frequent asked and answered questions.
it should read Fa, Q, I read it for kicks
Mal diction:
I spit on fake MC’s; ahem! And put an end to them; Amen!
When Miracle steps on the scale it dont read numbers, it simply says: AGAIN!
Playful opener. I’ll be honest though I only like this one for the flow and humor. However it’s a bit cliche but I’ll give it to you at least you built it up and packaged it nicely.
Alas!..you’re doomed.. Putting you in a cocoon’s my task
Sentiments of the first bar, i’ll be dropping you like science... aftermath
I think it’s a decent rhyme scheme actually. First and last word in the first line rhymes, then the two middle words doomed cocooned
Forgive me as I’m trying to break it down and sometimes I get carried away. But it seems in this bar you built some pretty interesting imagery, was it that you are saying in this battle you will out rap (wrap) him out the cocoon? Sentiments to the first line you drop science after math. So I’m guessing the drop is for cocoon suggesting you will drop and out wrap the lil 🐛 and force a transformation from him in the aftermaths as well as since you dropped a math line prior.. I feel like I reached with this one so because of that ima say I feel like this line was too loose not very concise. Didn’t wow me or fill in the gaps for me. I’ll give it a 5.3/10
I’m winning by a large margin..o’ the fat jokes, you would forget you MC’ed
Seeing you in every part of this battle, and that’s speaking more than figuratively
Ok here is a bit of a swing ok ok now we heating up…
Some fat wordplay here “by a large margin” “fat jokes” “mc’ed”
“Seeing you in every part” “figuratively “- so pretty straightforward the punch seeing you in every part of the battle was another fat joke and doubled the sting with the word figure. Maybe mc also was pun to mean mass x light. If so then I can see a slight layer in weight and seeing him in every part of the battle.
The imagery is seen, i hope by now we get the picture
In the bible: discipline feeds and from the looks miracle ain't missing dinner
Really good rhyme scheme on this one for sure
Plotting the main course. Forget your ghostwriter.
In ten lines, i brought the flame to Mir like most lighters
Ngl I don’t like the wording and it took me like 4 reads to grasp a concept from this but now that I have I can say it’s pretty good..
Plotting the main course is setting it up for food needing to be cooked. Then finishes with brought the flame to mir like most lighters..- if the line was actually bringing a lighter flame to the mirror ida been like ehhhh’ but I finally caught the “to” so it’s really read in ten lines I brought the flame, 2 mirror like most lighters. Two mirrors can actually be a lighter in sunlight I just wish it was contructed a bit better.
Miracle:
It’s easy for me to rap n come up with lines. A couple insults I’ll hurl
Every time I drop a couple, it makes me wanna punch u n your girl
Ok straight to the point and I get it dope line , couple is a play of relationship couples so you literally through a couple, couple insults
Fuck everything this queers keying, it’s wack n we’re all agreeing
Whenever we read malcontent, that’s exactly how we feel about what we’re seeing
Niceeee don’t know if intentionally done however this queers keying and this squares keying are homophones now I think I’m reaching to say this is a homo homo phone phone lol queer being a word used to describe someone’s sexual preferences that align with same sex or homosexuality then phones are squared and used to type messages or make calls and that can be “keying” so literally it’s a homophone however it’s used to describe sexual preference and cell devices lol that’s rich! And obviously the malcontent wordplay is superb.
All work n no play… that’s the shit that got ya wife straying away
No worries tho we always keep it briefcase you show up early from work that day
Nice word play here pretty obvious the punch line here but def hit
You’re a sad/hopeless faggot. Killing ya self would be a good start
Nevermind mentioning ur insecurity mal, ….your probably a rent a cop
Nice wordplay here too yeah definitely a decent line. In security insecurity
Ya girl claims to be a loner… but still let’s me beat it till it’s mushy
Idk if she’s a recluse <— but splitting that in 2 words is how I’d describe her pussy
lol 😆 bit a stretch no pun intended
Ok both battlers came with heat. I personally feel the verse that was more to the point with some heavy hitters is miracle. However I did enjoy and appreciate the intricate wordplay on both ends. As well mal you kept a solid theme all the way through it’s just a few lines I had to read a few times to grasp.
V/mir
FAQ - pronounced fack…
Eye or E.Y.E - divination (seek knowledge using computers)
Reddit- A web “sight” with frequent asked and answered questions.
it should read Fa, Q, I read it for kicks
I spit on fake MC’s; ahem! And put an end to them; Amen!
When Miracle steps on the scale it dont read numbers, it simply says: AGAIN!
didnt land hard imo
Alas!..you’re doomed.. Putting you in a cocoon’s my task
Sentiments of the first bar, i’ll be dropping you like science... aftermath
better for sure and creative flow
I’m winning by a large margin..o’ the fat jokes, you would forget you MC’ed
Seeing you in every part of this battle, and that’s speaking more than figuratively
liked this one, creative fat flip thats been overdone
The imagery is seen, i hope by now we get the picture
In the bible: discipline feeds and from the looks miracle ain't missing dinner
eh
Plotting the main course. Forget your ghostwriter.
In ten lines, i brought the flame to Mir like most lighters
not the strongest close, didnt fit with the rest of your verse complexity wise, either
not bad - some good lines and creative concepts and flows.
It’s easy for me to rap n come up with lines. A couple insults I’ll hurl
Every time I drop a couple, it makes me wanna punch u n your girl
eh, pretty simple here nothing special
Fuck everything this queers keying, it’s wack n we’re all agreeing
Whenever we read malcontent, that’s exactly how we feel about what we’re seeing
good wp
All work n no play… that’s the shit that got ya wife straying away
No worries tho we always keep it briefcase you show up early from work that day
lol'd a little
You’re a sad/hopeless faggot. Killing ya self would be a good start
Nevermind mentioning ur insecurity mal, ….your probably a rent a cop
meh
Ya girl claims to be a loner… but still let’s me beat it till it’s mushy
Idk if she’s a recluse <— but splitting that in 2 words is how I’d describe her pussy
decent attempt but def a bit forced, too
closer than i thought it would be. Miracle landed more, cleaner punches with a few witty wp's thats the deciding factor for me
vote - mir
Mir wins
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