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    Thumbs up I wrote too much

    Life’s a precocious saga. We’re defined by the moments
    that require our composure to triumph and overcome.
    You either rise from the ocean like you’re supposed to,
    …or drown in the changing tides of emotion.
    Define what your role is.
    Find you a focal point you consider worth your time and a motive
    But keep in mind that the shoulders of giants uphold us.

    tears form in your eyes. upturned smile, awkward the silence
    there’s no more talking this time. finger points, drawing a line
    under all you’ve been mindful of and even more she would hide
    the female you’ve been calling your wife becomes a perpetual thorn in your side.
    it’s endemic.
    you’re left wrenching your heart from the floor
    ironic how everything so blasé before now seems so hard to ignore

    fragmented. lack sensibility, in need of assurance
    gave you every reason to forfeit us and default the mortgage
    we’ve seen how divorce is dressed up, ain’t nothing pretty in black
    just when I think there’s attraction between us you begin to retract
    with everything that you have. you’ll push me away
    love feels so strange lately. stood open mouthed with nothing to say,
    something has changed. maybe not for the better
    I want to give everything to you but without the consummate pressure
    of us together. promised my efforts wouldn’t subside
    feel like I failed you when I look in your eyes.
    ugly inside.
    wondering why the woman beside me’s so reluctant to try
    disinterested. when I’ve invested nothing but time
    pushed me aside like I’m trash. tried to ask what’s on your mind
    been watching us die slowly. feel like a bird shot from the sky
    unconsciously spiralling into free fall with all logic defied
    robotic the smile on my face. tyres on the waist like Optimus prime
    WhatsApp declined. too scared of hearing it’s over to drop you a line
    it’s not that I’m fine, it’s the furtherest thing from it you’ll find

    what’s on your mind?


    red light district. felt quite different from how it was in the night
    electricity pulsing inside its veins. heartbeats with nothing to hide
    ugliness finds its own personality when it all comes into light
    discovering why surface level aesthetics lack the substance desired
    somebodys lying. hey, either it’s them or it’s you
    lend me the usual. I’ll buy you a drink and tell you my truth
    perpetual recluse. Thomas Street prophecy gospel in sneakers
    comic book reader. anxious avoidant, polluted oxygen breather
    homogenous heathen. unpopular even by Reddit standards
    getting bladdered, only drink to forget whatever mattered
    at the time. heavy handed, a glass of wine to get romantic
    drank up mine to set the standard. asinine as empty glasses
    braggers rights. unhealthy habits pass the time but never manage
    to hand us life. forever damaged, half the price we expect to carry
    sold out. with our soul doubts still lingering on
    blink and you’re gone quick as whatever you think you did wrong
    pretty much gone missing each time the game needed me most
    field full of ghosts. John Terry, only appearing for trophies
    unreasonable coping mechanisms always feeding me hope
    eager to show people the ropes. ain’t nothing real as the hopeless
    been with the roaches so long, this feels like my home
    went and wormed out a dirt mound I could sleep on my own
    can’t teach me nothing on creature comforts. the dung beetles I know
    pushed the same shit every day since and got zero to show
    really it’s cold outside if you ain’t learned to adapt
    sometimes it’s easier turning your back on it than to return to your past
    the birth of a champion.

    wandering star, pulsating against the nothing afar
    stuck in a dark yawning expanse yearning to pull it apart
    imagine this all comes from a spark of singularity
    grim reality is we wouldn’t be here without this thing from happening
    the distant galaxy before us wouldn’t exist
    something from nothing is inconceivable to us as it is
    the fact it does is just simply astounding.
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    Re: I wrote too much

    this is pretty dope, for some reason I read it like if Joyner Lucas was rapping it. It matched his flow and vocabulary pretty well. I think that's what made some of the more wordier lines hit much better to me as I was reading. Good piece bro.
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    Re: I wrote too much

    it’s just random bits and pieces thrown together tbreal

    but thanks for reading

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